Wednesday, January 31, 2018

#WIPpet Wednesday - Goth of Christmas Past - And Without Hot Chocolate #amwriting #lgbtqia


WIPpet numbers for 31st January, 2018:
3+1 = 4 paragraphs  Goth of Christmas Past


WIPpet Context:
I’m still snipping Goth of Christmas Past. This follows more or less straight from last week’s snippet in which Jay was contemplating vending machine soup. Note (to explain the second paragraph): Hadyn has OCD, although he has just been handling a dusty Christmas tree…

Emma—my wonderful illustrator—has come up with a second version of Jay and Krissi, which is awesome, and now I’m in a dilemma whether to keep the original (pictured) or go with the new one. I think I know what to do, but I”d appreciate your thoughts.

QUESTION: Based on the current cover, what kind of story would you expect?

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Here’s the snippet:
[Jay] “Is the hot chocolate working?”

“It was earlier.” Hadyn was already on his way upstairs and continued in a hasty but controlled manner all the way to the toilet.

Jay eyed the machine and then the coins in his hand. He’d either get a half-decent hot chocolate or lose 50p. He decided to risk it and fed three twenty-pence pieces into the slot. The display registered 40p. He added another 20p. The display remained unchanged. On the off-chance it was a glitch in that rather than the mechanism, he pressed the ‘dispense’ button. Please insert the correct amount. Jay hit the ‘return money’ button, but the machine wasn’t having that, either.

“Keep it,” he muttered and walked off before his fantasy of taking a sledgehammer to the thing became reality. He didn’t even want hot chocolate that much, but the choice would’ve been nice.
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Thanks for reading
Deb x

6 comments:

  1. Argh, the machine eating my coins would drive me bananas. Poor Jay.

    The cover...hm. If I saw the cover in a store, I'd imagine it was either a cute YA friends story or a cute YA romance. I love the anime style, but in either case, I would assume it's not aimed at my age group. I showed it to S the first time you posted, though, and she was a bit meh--she assumed it was a romance, which is not her thing. (I thought she'd like the artwork because she loves anime.)

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    1. Hmm. Well, it's not a romance. Or YA. Friends story, yes, so that's a start, LOL. New Adult. I'd love to know what S thinks of the second version (if you and she don't mind).

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    2. I'll ask her. She has rehearsal today, so it'll be kind of late when she gets home. But I'm sure she won't mind.

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  2. And he didn't even get his hot chocolate. :( I've had things get stuck in the machine nd not want to come out before. Vending machines can be a pain. :)

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  3. I won't even start on the vending machine... it's all been said. But I do like how he handles it. Very real.

    I had to wonder a few times about the cover as well. It felt very YA romance, possibly even younger than that. Not quite kawai, but hinting at it.

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  4. There are very good reasons I seldom use vending machines... this is among them. As for the cover. Yes, it says YA romance to me as well. (Did for my Anna as well, and neither of us is into Anime.)

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